As you see, we live in terrible decade.. we have to cope with Corona virus, pollution of earth , wars and so on. But in my opinion the most important ones are the issues which are associated with ear

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As you see, we live in terrible decade.. we have to cope with Corona virus, pollution of earth , wars and so on. But in my opinion the most important ones are the issues which are associated with earth as climate changing, heat of earth.. Because it's gonna be transferred to our next generations. So we have to care more about our environment because it's gonna be a reflection of the way we lived .. We shouldn't destroy human generation.. This planet needs humankind.

23 мая 2021 г., 15:21

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As is clearly evident, we live in a terrible age - we have to cope with coronavirus, pollution of the Earth, wars, and so on. But in my opinion the most important issues are the ones which are associated with the environment such as climate change and deforestation, because these will have dark consequences for future generations. Therefore, we must care more about our environment because it will be a reflection of the way we lived. We must not destroy future human generations. This planet needs humankind.

Hello there, honey! Well done for having a go! Most of the corrections I have made relate to more suitable ways to express what it is that you would like to say, organisation of your thoughts and ideas, and the register of your language. For example, better to say, "as is clearly evident" rather than "as you can see". Leave spaces between your paragraphs so that it is visually more organised and appealing. "Climate change" and "heat of Earth" (which should in fact be "global-warming") are the same phenomena, so here I added "deforestation" instead. Finally, avoid contractions and slang such as "it's gonna", because this is a serious subject and therefore should be written in a semi-formal style. Hope it helps! If there is anything more I can do to explain, give me a shout! From me to you, sentiments of light and peace! ☝🏽🙏🏽🤲🏽🔥🌞🕊️🌈🌠

23 мая 2021 г.

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